用简洁语言写漂亮句子–托福作文

众多考生在托福作文的写作中认为复杂句能够拉升作文的质量，显示出“地道”的英文得到更高的分数。而这想法是有道理的，因为新托福写作的评分标准中有从语法或用词的多样性等角度考察语言的质量评分项目，有时候生硬地寻求长句、复杂句反会伤句子的精确性。下边，我们就来谈谈怎样帮你的托福作文“去掉不必要东西，减减肥”，用简洁的语言描写出漂亮的句子：

第一点： 避免空疏的单词组

1. 一点空疏的单词或词组根本不得为句子带来任何相关的或关紧的信息，足以被删掉。譬如下边的句子：

When all things are considered，young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents，in my opinion。

这句话的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“看上去就是多余的，足以去掉。改为：

Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。

2. 有点空疏和繁琐的表现形式可以施行替换，例如：

Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents，they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。

“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表现形式的例子，可以替换，简化为下边的表现形式：

Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents，they did not have the options that young people have now。

第二点： 避免重复
1. 尽力避免重复用同样的词汇。还是有的时分虽然词汇没有重复，但意思却有重复。这会儿可以做一点简化。例如次边这个例子：
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。

large 对一个farm来说就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改为：

The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。

更简洁的表现形式为：

My grandfather grew up on a large farm。

2. 有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换，例如：

My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents’ farm。

这搭的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly，显得更为简洁：

My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents’ farm。

第三点：挑选最妥当的语法结构

挑选合宜的语法结构可以使句子意思的表现更为精密和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很关紧，但取舍最妥当的语法结构毅然是更为关紧的考量因素。以下，引荐几种考生们在考量挑选何种语法结构时可以参考的原则：

1. 一个句子的主语和谓语动词应当能够反映句子中的最关紧的意思。例如：

??The situation that resulted in my grandfather’s not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。

从意思上来剖析，上头这句话需要表现的关紧的概念是“grandfather’s not being able to study”，而在表现这个概念时，原句用的主语是situation，谓语动词是was，不得强调需要表现的重点概念，可以改为下边这句话：

My grandfather couldn’t study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。

2. 避免频繁使役“there be”结构，例如次边的句子：

??There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。

可以改为：My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。

更简洁的句式为：

My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。

3. 把从句改为短语或单词。例如：

Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。

简介的表现形式为：

??The dairy farm was located in a remote area，100 kilometers to the nearest university。

4. 仅在需好强调宾语而不是主语的时分，才使役被动语态。例如：

??In the fall，not only did the cows have to be milked，but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather’s family。

本句不够简洁的端由是本句的重心应当是“忙乎的家子——my grandfather’s family”，而使役了被动语态后，仿佛重心成为了cows和hay。下边的表现形式是主动语态，相对来说更简洁一点：

In the fall，my grandfather’s family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。